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I am such a jimxariel fangirl it makes me wanna squeal and puke simultaneously... but I felt like sharing some of it with you... I'm working on a fanfic but the closer I get to sharing it the further I get from actually sharing it XD Also this is my #5 "Dreams" for the 100 Themes Challenge, Variation #4!
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I just love the tenderness in this picture-the flow of her hair and the look in her eyes. It is indeed very dreamy, especially with all the white space you left.

At the same time it is this white space that makes things worse for this drawing. The grey-yellowish tint surrounding the character seems too much of a contrast on the bright white background. A pure white background would work fine. Even if I think pencil pictures should generally be grayscaled to eliminate the yellowish tint (unless a desired effect) and make them easier for clean up, I still think that an evenly yellowish tint for the whole picture would have been better than a yellow on white background.
The way the bodies are cropped on the left side seem to enhance this feeling of the drawing being pasted on top of a white background and hugely distracting from the main point.
Adding to this is the huge dA watermark which, considering how tiny the image is, makes it almost impossible to see the details.
A range of computer software can be used to create your own watermark in a more unobtrusive way.
I think the way to go here is either
-crop the drawing entirely with no background for a greater impact or
-move the drawing down a bit to avoid centring, convert the picture to Grayscale and clean up excessive tones to make it seamlessly merge with the background. leaving more background can be a bit distracting but can add to a dreamier feeling if composition is handled with care.
-create a smaller watermark

Most of my notes concern the editing as you see. The drawing itself is nice with a decent composition, nice contrast and a tender atmosphere. Drawing more than one person in a picture is always hard to deal with, especially interacting bodies -hugging, kissing etc. so a good job with that :thumbsup:
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spiderxand Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Whoa.
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:D
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sandcastler Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
Cute pose; I love her upward gaze.
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks, I picture Ariel as having a small stature
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JCCVLover Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
AWESOME!
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you!!!
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JCCVLover Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome! :)
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SweetVenom94 Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nice ^^
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thanks :3
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SweetVenom94 Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np ^^
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NeonTheDark Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
interesting, i came to this website to observe the art of men and women alike to review, compare, and contrast the opposite sexes styles, (I.E. mens shading versus womens shading) but there seems to be a surplus of artistic women and fangirls on this website, im not complaining or anything, but where are the male artists on this site? can you point me to one of them?
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I don't actually know, however you inquiry fascinates me! But when I look at art6 I ont pay attention to who made it (man or woman) maybe see if there is a male group?
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masterfedora Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
Oh lovely. I like how she's looking up at him, very cute. Her hair looks great too.
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thanks c:
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DivaBlueRose Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Student Artist
WOW AWESOME
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you! :3
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DivaBlueRose Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Student Artist
ur welcome
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StandingOnMyHead Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
How cute! I love the possision and the expression :love:
They're so cute together!
(Sorry for my bad english)
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you and you're English is better than most!
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StandingOnMyHead Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012
Thanks! :aww:
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:3 you're welcome
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AsetNuit Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012
Romantic :)
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you c:
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Mereeel Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
Amazing drawing
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you!!!
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moonlitinuyasha1985 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
:iconnosebleedfaintplz:

I love it.:thumbsup:
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you :3
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moonlitinuyasha1985 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
YW
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liyah65 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012
THIS IS BEAUTIFUL !
The tones are great in this and I love Ariels expression and Jims face :aww:
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:3 thank you!
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shadow-hostage Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My brain: -functional thou- HOT DAMN HIS ABS.
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
LOL i knoes i had to accentuate his masculinity via his physicality XD
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shadow-hostage Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I kneel before your awesome. :worship:
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:3 LOL thanks
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hiddenbrokenheart Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Beautifully done, and I love that her hair looks like ocean waves
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you!!! and ocean waves! thats so sweet of you c:
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hiddenbrokenheart Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
Your welcome and don't mention it :)
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
c:
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ILoveKimPossibleAlot Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student Filmographer
Cool effect here!
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you!
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ILoveKimPossibleAlot Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Filmographer
No problem!
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Nomad55 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is very awesome :D Love the details
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
haha thank you
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Nomad55 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:D
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23jk Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Ooooh, it looks really nice, awesome job :)
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thanks!
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LilGirl2016 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
fantastic
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:iconjustinistilborn:
JusTiniStilborn Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you
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LilGirl2016 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
your welcome
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